Areas i need to improve:

from my feedback it seems i need to go into more detail about the changes in music so student can write about things like convergence in the exams - thats one of the things i havnt yet covered (among others). So far i think i need to just doubley make sure that my essay meets all of the important revision points for the students otherwise it'll be pretty invalid to the newspaper and not contain any info that was necessary to utilize. I'll try and cover more aspects other than music too to try and bring out good terminology/jargon for students to learn..